Thursday, November 10, 2011

441. Meretun Keempat

Pocketeers,
Sambungan dari 440. Meretun Ketiga
i am sorry but i could not conclude
the whole story in 3 post.
it had to be more.
so here goes the fourth meretun...

Pocket..
..was having the idea of punishing Maria
himself, thought that that was the best idea
he could think off. If he hand Maria to the
police, the cloak will be confiscated. tak ker rugi tu?

and so he went on to where maria worked.
The laundry area.
When u'r invisible, it was not hard walking towards
the laundry area even though its the middle of the
night, even though you are not suppose to be there.
u'r invisible, no one can see u,
and even if anyone see a door opened
by itself, there is always the wind to blame.

He opened the door and there she is..
working all by herself washing customer's
bedsheet filled with sweat from ladies doing it,
blood from pakcik scratching their kurap,
and vomit from the drunken abang who drink
too much. eeeuuuu!!!

Pocket didnt say much,
the hammer is in his hand, he swung one hard blow to
maria's left cheek and down she goes. She didnt scream,
she didnt see it coming. 'Siaall!! ko hamik baju aku!!'
she cried after, ohh that was fast thinking..
budak U.. memang gitu
blood coming from her mouth.
She spat out a broken tooth.
That one was for Fatihah the waitress,
hospitalized with broken jaw.
'Camana ko rase Maria? sekarang ko plak jadi mangsa?'
'Pocket? sial kau!! aku bunu...ngh*' she could not
finish her words as another hard swing to her rib.
That was for Azie from the kitchen.
Her siku broke and she had to quit.
the hotel just could not pay for
her paid medical leave.
More and more swing of the hammer
let loose by the pocket. let her rip,
let her feel the pain she so proudly let.

'eh maria! ko ok ker?' her colleague
who dont understand a thing came asking.
Someone came in and must have heard
her crying from the opened door.
No.. i'm not kantul yet,
she just came in,
she didnt see anything.
She didnt see me.
'ko cakap kater ko pening jer sikit...
jangan tengok dia!! kang kantul la mulut
tu darah' pocket warned her.
The punishment is not finished.

'aku ok jer linda.. peningm jer sikit'without even looking
Maria obeyed, she had to, the cold steel
of the hammer was touching her left forehead.
Linda looked puzzle, she looked left and right,
and leave the place.
Sound of foot steps leaving the laundry room.
Pocket checked.. yes, Linda is no longer there.
The door was closed.
This is better.
Cause after this, there will be
the sound of steel breaking bones.

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Remember that last pantun
from the post : 435. OK Dah Abaang.. ??

kinda fit this post too kan?

15 comments:

rozeeta rashid said...

mula2 bila tengok post ni, scroll sampai bawah tengok ada sambungan lagi tak. haha.

fuiyo pocket pun jadi kejam macam maria dahhh!

Hermin said...

kalau buat buku...nak buat mcm novel ke dlm bentuk komik? tp kalau komik lg best! ^^

Akue Achik said...

dah macam nite on the elm street da seramnye....huhuhuhhuuuuuu

Aemy Shamy said...

aaaaa i missed a lot of story....by hook or by crook i need to read it from the beginning right? hehe..

littledolphin said...

creepy. *gulp*

zonaku said...

alert me when it reached finale.

Pocket said...

RozeetaRashid,
hahahah, jahat :D
yes.. manusia bila dah ada kuasa,
memang gitu jadinya.. kamu bagaimana?

Hermin,
ingat komik lagi besh kot.
nanti bila pocket dah buleh melukis nanti,
pocket try tengok!! :D

Achik,
hehehe, tp pocket tak pandai men'debar-debar' kan pembaca... kena usaha lagi kot.

Aemy,
Copy n past it into your comp first,
then if u have the time ...
i would be grateful if u read this
story from the first series.

ShaheerahHana,
Meremang yek? alaa..
bukan cerita antu pun :D

Zonaku,
alaaa.. kalau kamu hanya nak baca bila dah sampai finale... sama macam kamu beli DVD Smallville season 10 nanti nuh laa..

unsur unsur berdebar debar tu kurang la beb:D

heheheh

Dhiya Fariza said...

So did pocket kill her off? The pantun i dont get it, not fully understands it, so i do not know how to imply it to this story

But the way u create this story and the suspend u build, i shall say a very good job and well indeed.

Bravo pocket a.k.a oh u know i know ur real name right hikhikhik

*SiRibenMerah said...

i hate u.. bosan laaa buat story sambung2 neh..
geram nk tau ending....

Pocket said...

DhiyaFariza,
well the pantun was not engineered properly
anyway so cant blame u for not understanding
the connection :D

did pocket killed Maria?
well he have to..
now that maria know it was
him under the cloak. huhuuuuuuu


Iyra,
alaaaa... selalu satu cerita satu post,
kali ni bagi la satu cerita banyak post plak:) heheheh

ending nyer? pocket kawin ngan maria dapat anak halimunan semuer.. hahahah
merapu jer kan pocket nih.. ohh

zonaku said...

too many debaran la sekarang.....



karang heart beat tunggang langgang, berakhir dlm wad pulak.......

Hanie_Dew said...

uhuhuhu..best best. sambung pocket.atau.......

kalau mimpi ko da abes pun sambung jugak sambung jugak.

Hanie_Dew said...

best sgt part ko bash maria tu. ee..let her rip! let her rip!

eh tp entah entah sume tu jd bila pakai cloak tu je ke. cloak tu behantu. bila pakai je jd jahat. tukar jd demond yg kejam.

Jue said...

Aku jd takut lak bc as if ko dah ilang kwln. As if mcm ko ngan maria neh xde bezanya. Ttibe rs cam lelaki dayus yg pkul pompuan hahaha

~ayusleeping~ said...

ayu folow sini.. ;)